2. 20103 김창준 - 4 points
Grade
20102 재원 : You need to find and search more research. Your essay can not be persuasive without many articles that agree your argument and I hope you to follow classical argument format.
20103 창준 : I CAN NOT FOCUS ON YOUR ESSAY! Please, type 'enter' when you want to write new research or other arguments
Thesis
What is the thesis?
20102 재원 "So, we need to check dangerous diseases that have threaten us, once even called pandemic." I think it must be your thesis. it is AWESOME.
What is the thesis?
20102 재원 "So, we need to check dangerous diseases that have threaten us, once even called pandemic." I think it must be your thesis. it is AWESOME.
20103 창준 "However, actual situation is not that good. Actually, I believe that situation is serious and there needs a government's measure to the problem." it must be your thesis because you helped me find this. It is good and I could easily understand what you want to say. However, I think, it is too long.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes and yes.
Any other thoughts?
Yes and yes.
Any other thoughts?
More research and classical argument format please.More research and classical argument format please.
Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
Research
Is the author using research effectively?
No and yes
Is the research from appropriate sources?
Are the sources obvious?
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