Week 6. Intro

The introduction

1. Attract the audience

1. I will attract the audience with relating voting system and democracy
2. I will USE the example, 'Louis XVI's execution'
3. ex) Voting is a human's common right to decide something as democratic way.  As democracy has been developed, voting and voting system have really big influence

2. Explain the topic

1. To explain the topic, I will relate developing technology, e-voting system  and analog voting system and than, I will explain my topic. 
2. ex) As technology is developed, many people said that evolution of voting system is necessary with reasoning analog voting system's problems. E-voting system, therefore, has been issued as one of  alternative. However, some people said that there are much more serious problem on e-voting system. Therefore, I want to ask them. Should e-voting system replace analog voting system?

3. Declare your thesis

1. e-voting system should replace analog voting system. < it is my thesis because analog voting system has many problems nowadays in terms of society, human right and efficiency that can be solved by e-voting system.

My introduction in first draft.

  Voting is a human's common right to decide something as democratic way.  As democracy has been developed, voting and voting system have really big influence. However, nowadays, many people don't know how voting and voting system are important and powerful. Actually, one vote can change the world. For example, when French revolution, Louis XVI's execution was decided by voting system. As technology is developed, many people said that evolution of voting system is necessary with reasoning analog voting system's problems. E-voting system, therefore, has been issued as one of  alternatives. However, some people said that there are much more serious problem on e-voting system. Therefore, the application of e-voting system has been delayed. In my opinion, we should replace analog voting system with e-voting system